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In the future it will become more difficult to live on Earth so more money should be spent researching how to live on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to
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 the lack of natural resources, it seems that the
earth
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 will be in a troublesome situation and there will be no hope to live on it.
According to
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 one school of thought,
scientists
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 should conduct more researches to make other planets capable of living.
However
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, I do not fully agree with
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 statement.
This
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 essay will discuss the need of researching other planets
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 possible measures to make our planet viable. A plethora of hurdles related to life on the
earth
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 planet is causing catastrophic upshots on mankind.
To begin
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 with, global warming and depletion of the ozone layer are the first and foremost reasons for the incapability of humankind to live on
earth
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. As they alter the planet's temperature
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 cause natural calamities like storms, volcanoes, tsunamis etc. But they can be sorted out with afforestation, alleviating pollution and by using eco-friendly vehicles.
Secondly
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, a population explosion is a monster, that continuously swallows each progressive action done by people. It is a dangerous threat but can be overcome by applying strict laws of family planning.
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,
scientists
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 can do numerous
research
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 to solve all kinds of hassles of individuals.
On the other hand
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, some people assert that
scientists
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 have to spend more money on conducting various
research
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 that how life can be possible on other planets like Mars, to check gravity, oxygen availability, food and water resources, making homes and robots that help to live there and so on. People believe that the
earth
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 will be destructed in future so there is no need to renovate it. Conducting recent
research
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 on how to survive on Mars is a prime example of it. In the nutshell, I believe that vying between
scientists
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 to conduct new
research
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 is a sheer waste of money.
Earth
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 is a beautiful gift given to human beings by God. So, it is our responsibility to limit the use of natural resources and will have to prevent every kind of pollution and destruction, so spending money to save the
earth
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 is worthwhile.

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