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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #communication #technology #effects #relationships
Society is more and more modernized to
improved
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the quality of
human’s
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lifes
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lives
life
.
One
 of the most crucial inventions nowadays is
the
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technology which helps us
communicating
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with others.
However
, I
am
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both agree and disagree with the idea that it is having some bad effects on social relationships.
One
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the
one
 hand, I believe that using these technologies can help us
having
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more friends or more people who give us important lessons. If you use some social applications
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, etc, you may meet many people who want to find someone to chat, to
share
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 their stories
.
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 You
also
 can meet your best friend or even your lover on it. Thanks to these relationships, you will become more confident and friendly.
One
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the other hand, it is
also
 caused many problems.
Firstly
, there are some people
depend
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who depend
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 on these relationships to buy
sell
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and sell
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 drugs.
Reality
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, many students
espciall
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especially
the secondary ones use drugs because their “best friend” told them.
Secondly
, conflicts are begun from it. If you made friends with some bad ones, you would easily
to
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be joined into their conflicts
although
 you did not want to.
Finally
, many women and men are in love with somebody on
internet
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, there are around 40% that they
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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