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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, almost everything in our lives has been modernized, including means of
communication
.
However
, many
people
 argue that
these
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modern
communication
 technology is having
detrimental
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a detrimental
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effect
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effects
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 on social relationships. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 idea. First and foremost, these cutting-edge means of
communication
 are causing
people
 to neglect face-to-face interaction. Modern as
communication
 technology may be, they are unable to convey feelings from one person to another.
Hence
, conversations had through these devices
“unrealistic”
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 and “fake”. The
long term
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 effect of
this
 is devastating. It causes relationships to eventually fall apart, ruining many
people
’s social lives.
Secondly
, since most
of
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the
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modern
communication
 platforms are free, many
people
 take advantage of
it
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them
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 for violence.
Although
 there are policies that
people
 have to follow,
otherwise
 they will be punished, many
people
 have found ways to break the rules without being caught and are able to send threats,
violent
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 and rude messages to others. The victims are negatively affected by
this
 and
thus
, leading to the downfall of their
socia
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social
 relationships. In conclusion, despite the convenience that modern
communication
 devices bring, they
also
 have negative impacts on
people
’s social relationship
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