Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, almost everything in our lives has been modernized, including means of

communication

.

However

, many

people

argue that

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modern

communication

technology is having

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effect

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on social relationships. In my opinion, I completely agree with

this

idea. First and foremost, these cutting-edge means of

communication

are causing

people

to neglect face-to-face interaction. Modern as

communication

technology may be, they are unable to convey feelings from one person to another.

Hence

, conversations had through these devices

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and “fake”. The

long term

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effect of

this

is devastating. It causes relationships to eventually fall apart, ruining many

people

’s social lives.

Secondly

, since most

of

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the

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modern

communication

platforms are free, many

people

take advantage of

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for violence.

Although

there are policies that

people

have to follow,

otherwise

they will be punished, many

people

have found ways to break the rules without being caught and are able to send threats,

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and rude messages to others. The victims are negatively affected by

this

and

thus

, leading to the downfall of their

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social

relationships. In conclusion, despite the convenience that modern

communication

devices bring, they

also

have negative impacts on

people

’s social relationship