Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatificatory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. discuse both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there is a serious debate on two different views, a group of individuals believe the employees should accept the bad conditions and stay in their jobs
such
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as low salaries,
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unsatisfaction
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environments. Other
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have opposite viewpoints. I believe both views are valuable under certain circumstances and should have been taken into consideration. On the one hand, some people claim that
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the workforces
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workforces
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should accept their
work
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situation
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and stay in their position because may they
do
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not find
better
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a better
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position or
job
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and
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situation
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the situation
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become
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worse
worsens
.
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, sometimes
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patient
can
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resolve
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many
problem
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problems
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.
In other words
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, many
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between
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colleagues
or
boss
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bosses
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happen because of
misundrestand
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misunderstand
misunderstood
and in
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case, just need more time to adapt
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each
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. I do not find
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argument convincing as there are many jobs and
peoplehave
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people have
right
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the right
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to change easily their
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so
thay
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they
do not have to accept
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the bad
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condition
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conditions
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of their
work
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.
On the other hand
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, a group of individuals
jastifiably
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justifiably
argue that people should try to improve their
situation
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.
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, the employees can develop their
skils
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to improve their position or even change their jobs.
Furthermore
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, from a
pyscological
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psychological
physiological
viewpoint, working in a poor
job
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situation
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cause many mental
problem
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problems
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such
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as depression and
anxatiy
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anxiety
,
stress
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and stress
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. Even though, they can go abroad to improve their
job
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condition.
To conclude
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, I believe
workforeces
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workforces
workforce
should spend time to improve their
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ont
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and
condition their
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,
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if they do not reach to
satification
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satisfaction
. They should leave their
job
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and
trying
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try
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to find
better
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a better
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job
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jobs
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for
themeselves
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themselves
.
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