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Band 4

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#person #decision #support
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Nowadays, in many
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society
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 some
people
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 can’t make a
decision
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 alone. Some other strongly believe everyone must
be get
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 a
decision
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 alone eventually
although
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 in general humans need advice additional in
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last
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 century. We’ll
discussed
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point
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 of
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a bout
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this
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 issue. First of all, some
people
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 don’t help from their families and relatives and think about their
decision
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 alone, because of that they believe any
people
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 recognize his or her self better than anyone differently
moreover
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 recognition of any mind
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 as their training and social conditions limited any human for getting a
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 that actually acceptable for other.
In
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the other
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other hand
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another hand
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, someone by regarding
to
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apply
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her or
his
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spiritual structure is introverted
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has
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embraces
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 for making a
decision
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with
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by
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 getting
colleague
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a colleague
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 that should be involved
one
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with one
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 friend who has familiar with the situation of her or his friend that
helping
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help
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for
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apply
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make a
decision
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to
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for
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 someone.
At
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the
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first
of
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, some professional
people
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 in their major said in the world with unfamiliar conditions and complicated
situation
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situations
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 any human for making a
decision
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 that will riches
to
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in
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 a good conclusion in future, must
be get
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be getting
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 advice from specialists. In conclusion,
by
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apply
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regarding
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regard
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to
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apply
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human
behavior
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behaviour
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 in complicated circumstances and social conditions any
decision
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 needs to identification about their situation and thoughts approximately 100
percent
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per cent
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thus
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 one person can’t
making
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make
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 a
decision
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 alone. In my
opinion
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 because of the investigation that
i
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I
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 study
a bout
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about
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this
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 issue and published in a famous journal
at
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 July of 2021, I believe making alone a
decision
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 is a false
decision
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.
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