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politicians are more responsible for protecting of the environment than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#politicians #environment #individuals
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention to the functionality issues of a
TV
 purchased from one of your stores. Please allow me to elaborate. I am Ishpreet and I live near
main
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 market. I
have
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purchased a 40 inches smart
TV
 with model number TA003
on
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the
last
 Friday from your store situated in my area. After installing the
TV
, I and my family
have
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found out that it is not functioning properly. The volume of the
TV
 is
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 without pressing any button
of
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 the remote. The
TV
 screen goes off for a few seconds
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every fifteen minutes
while
 watching it. The keys of the remote control are
also
 not functioning as instructed on it. To report
this
 issue, we have called
the
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customer services several times but we have not heard any helpful solution from them
till
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 date.
Due to
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 reason, I am writing
this
 letter to you
and
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to bring the problem
in
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 your notice. We have bought
this
TV
 for kids so that they will get involved during their summer breaks
while
 I and my husband will accomplish our work from home. I have attached all the relevant bills with
this
 letter and request
for
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an
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immediate action on
this
 problem.
Furthermore
, a week has already been wasted in communicating with
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customer services. I request
for
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a replacement of the
TV
 as soon as possible. Thanks, Ishpreet
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