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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that
men
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 and
women
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 have different characteristics and qualities, so not all types of
work
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 are equally suitable for both. I agree with
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 statement and will explain the reasons in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
women
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 are more empathetic than
men
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, and
men
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 are more suited to certain positions that require critical thinking skills. If they chose a career that matched their qualities, they would feel that jobs were easy to handle and could
work
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 more efficiently, which could lead to breakthrough success.
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, empathy is an essential skill
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 working as a therapist, and it is true that most
women
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 are equipped with
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 skill, but
men
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 are not.
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, males may need time to learn
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 skill first before becoming a therapist.
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, many fields are occupied by a certain gender.
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, most kindergarten teachers are
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, and most engineers are
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. If you choose a job where most employees are of the opposite gender as you, you may be seen as incapable of doing the job and even experience discrimination from them,
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 feeling stressed and anxious, which may
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 affect
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 efficiency to some extent. You may not be able to
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 in
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 environment for an extended period of time. In conclusion, based on the above evidence and analysis, both
women
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 and
men
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 should choose their jobs
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 their own qualities, so that to improve their
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 efficiency.
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, they can perform better in the workplace and achieve their
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 goals more easily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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