It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, the Extinction of animal
species
is increasingly found all over different parts of the world. Some claim that extinction is a natural process associated with rare
species
,
while
others
such
as environmentalists stress the importance
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the preservation of endangered
species
. In
this
essay, I will explore reasons why the statement is misleading and contrary to the view majority of us, uphold.  As human population and urbanization grew exponentially over the
last
two decades, it has resulted in frequent deforestation activities that destructed the inhabitants of various rare
animals
.
In addition
, it has caused many of them to have no means of survival and eventually die out sooner. It is utterly catastrophic to state that dinosaurs, dodos and white rhinos are formally declared extinct and now that all we have is a picture in google to show our future generations. 
Moreover
, polar bears are now becoming an endangered
species
,
as a result
of global warming which melts ice-caps and glaciers in the North Atlantic, which has left these innocent victims to die of hunger, as it prevents hunting.
This
is a grave humanitarian issue which requires immediate global attention and it is very pathetic that people still have no clue as to why
this
keeps on happening. Until it affects them directly, they fail to act
accordingly
. In no longer in future, if all the bees and other pollinators get extinct, humans will have serious repercussions in the future. As the ecosystem is interconnected with pollinators
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and generates humans to have a proper food-supply chain. Without bees, it would be impossible to ensure the cultivation of crops for farmers and detest to have an effective reproduction system with trees and flowers.
To conclude
, it is not a natural process in which
animals
get extinct but is a result of human failure to appreciate the benefits conferred by these
animals
in our lives. And I strongly disagree with the statement as I believe it is a social responsibility normally expected by a common citizen. If we all do small approaches to preserving these
animals
, it will benefit us in the long run.
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