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Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizer and better machinery. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

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 solutions , substantial people say that nourishment can be easily produced nowadays with the help of
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benefits. As we know, agriculture has
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 production.
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a chemical fertilizers
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health.
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crucial pollutants , like air pollution, water pollution and many more.
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 but not least, particular machinery which
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 widely used in basic farming are quite expensive, so poor farmers cannot
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convenience
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foods
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ands
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and
 nutrition resources are now more available with the help of
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 and chemical acids we can produce as we need .
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 negative aspects of it which I mention in the essay.
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