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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attraction. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, tourism is a major source of income in many countries. A lot of
people
 visit other parts of the world to explore various places with rich cultural and historical value.
However
, there are different opinions on if those who are travelling from abroad should be charged more than the locals.
This
 essay will argue why it is fair to increase
the
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foriegn
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foreign
 rates.
To begin
 with,
native
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people
 of a country have every right to explore and enjoy what they have inherited from their ancestors without money being a barrier. As
such
, entry to tourist attractions with cultural and historical importance should be affordable to all
the
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nationals.
For example
, if tickets to a
pominent
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prominent
 historical site in one's country
is
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 expensive, poor residents will never get a chance to visit it
while
 tourists from all over the world are able to witness it.
On the other hand
, when
foriegn
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foreign
 travellers
also
 pay
such
 low rates, a country would not be able to get a reasonable income from tourism.
Therefore
, it would not be a good idea to have a flat rate for both local and
foriegn
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foreign
 visitors. At the same time, most of the tourist sightseeing packages include special facilities which are not available to residents. Some of these features include short entry queues, separate
entraces
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entrances
entrance
, special car parks and improved toilet facilities in order to make their experience more comfortable.
As a result
,
foriegners
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foreigners
 enjoy more benefits than locals and
thus
 paying extra money for additional benefits is justifiable. In conclusion, many
people
 aspire to visit culturally and historically attractive places.
While
 it is appealing to have a lot of
foriegn
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foreign
vistiors
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visitors
, locals should be provided with less expensive options to enter these places. Since tourism is a major economic activity in most
of
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the
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countries, I believe that
people
 coming from abroad should be requested
pay
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additionally
while
 offering better facilities.
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