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Some people do same type of work for long time, while others change the type of work frequently. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Introduction
part of
comunities
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communities
are
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is
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 more
realible
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reliable
 having same
kinde
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kind
 of job for extend
perioed
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period
periods
 of time ,despite some of them have seen that more preferable to
change
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 their jobs
consisitantly
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consistently
,so
i
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 will
disscuse
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discuss
 of
diffrent
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different
 sides and
i
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I
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 will
contrbute
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contribute
 my own opinion on it .
Body paragraph 1
a number of
worker
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workers
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 doing their
carriers
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careers
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 for
whole
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the whole
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fo
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of
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 their
lifes
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lives
 that led to
attend
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attending
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 their
requirment
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requirement
 of
works
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work
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 more
realible
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reliable
 rather than engaging with multiple
workplacement
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work placement
work-placement
 to avoid as much as possible
work
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 pressure. employees
who`s
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who've
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 already
recived
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received
same
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the same
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 orders have been easier to
acheive
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achieve
 that with
sastisfactory
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satisfactory
result
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results
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 rather than to deal with diverse
requirment
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requirement
requirements
on
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in
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work
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 environment .
Body paragraph 2
on the other
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hand
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,hand
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skillfull
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skilful
skillfully
persons
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people
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 who always looking forward to
increase
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increasing
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 their
abilty
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ability
 through
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change
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changing
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 their movements and
paly
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play
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of roles in
work
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 placements remarkably ,
ratherthan
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rather than
 staying in the same
postion
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position
 or doing similar
work
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activies
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activities
 in that field .
profisional
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professional
 workers are
being
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apply
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more
adabtaple
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adaptable
 with multiple
task
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tasks
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 and under pressure
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work force
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workforce
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esspesialy
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especially
 who have
characterstic
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characteristic
their
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in their
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tyape
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type
 of
work
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 with risk ,
for
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instance
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emerngancey
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emergency
sectores
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sectors
 and survivors sections .so being able to enhance
preformance
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performance
 in
workplacement
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work placement
work-placement
 that
contrbution
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contribution
 to
influne
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influence
 your creativity and
increse
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increase
your
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you're
you are
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 producing in the
work
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effcintly
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efficiently
.
Body paragraph 3
in my point of view that great to have enough
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to expand
experiences
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your experiences
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 with particular
work
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 rather than
change
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 your
careeres
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careers
career
consistanlty
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consistently
 to have
wellqualifications
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well qualifications
 and
proficciance
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proficiency
 with your specialised
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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work
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 placement .
Conclusion
in
conclude
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conclusion
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,people who looking for
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change
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a change
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workplacment
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workplace
 are being more adaptable
persons
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people
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 with
underprusser
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underpressure
 and
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work force
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workforce
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 that
giving
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gives
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 them huge
promotione
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promotion
promotions
 and high
salries
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salaries
 rather than
to keep
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keeping
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 in
same
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the same
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placement
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place
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 without increasing their ability
suffciently
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sufficiently
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advocate
  • deep expertise
  • mastery
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term commitment
  • stability
  • predictability
  • professional relationships
  • broad skill set
  • adaptability
  • versatile
  • competitive
  • job market
  • dynamic
  • stimulating
  • career stagnation
  • personal and professional growth
  • career goals
  • continual learning
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