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Experts believe that, over the next decade, robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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Nowadays, artificial intelligence is starting to change many aspects of life in the world.One of these innovations is a robot and a lot of scientists made assumptions that many operations will be done by
robots
 in the near future. In my view,
this
 invaluable effect has certain negative and positive points simultaneously, which will be discussed in
this
 essay. The main advantage, what can
i
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 mention it is
a
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 fact that
people
 can get free from wasting time on useless and petty
work
. Or
conversely
, saving workers from too dangerous operations.
For instance
,
robots
 can
work
instead
 of employers who
work
 in mountainous areas or toxic factories, where ordinary
people
 are under the threat.
Moreover
, there are many establishments, where
work
 must never stop and where
robots
 can help a lot with their continuous
work
 without interruption.
As a result
, production
work
 will improve significantly. Despite positive facts, there are some disadvantages.
Firstly
, cases of unemployment will become greater. If menial labour is done by
robots
,
people
 without education will lose their jobs and poverty will
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.
Subsequently
, the demographic situation around the world will be deplorable. As
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 example,
majority
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 of
people
 in Kazakhstan do not have
professional
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degree
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 and have to
work
 in workplaces as wage-earners. All things considered,
besides
 many positive impacts
people
 will be exposed
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 negative facts.
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