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learning foreign language, advantages and disadvantages.

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In
whole
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the whole
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 world
child
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children
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an teenagers
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teenagers
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learning
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learn
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english
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English
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 in
the
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apply
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school
, from primary to high
school
 and university
also
. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 it is
very
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a very
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 important subject.
Language
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The language
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people
 speak wherever you travel is
english
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English
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obviously
obviosly
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obviously
, it is
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an intenational
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intenational
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international
intentional
language
. In my country Poland, education is
for
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apply
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free, parents do not spend money
for
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on
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school
 or teachers. We learn two foreign
language
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languages
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, of
course
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,course
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english
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English
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 and another one, you can choose. If you are
adult
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an adult
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 you must learn yourself or go to
langueage
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language
school
. I have some advantages and disadvantages
learning
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of learning
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
.
Firstly
, the best benefit of
language
leafning
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learning
 is making new connections. The more languages you know, the more
people
 you can communicate with, whether you are moving to a new country. You can
makes
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make
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 new friends or another better job.
Second
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The second
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 pro
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that come
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come
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comes
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 to my mind is boosting
a
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apply
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creativity. Learning a new
language
 and
then
 using it involves a lot of creative thinking. There are
also
 some cons. As I wrote before, if you are
adult
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an adult
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 you must go to
language
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a language
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school
,
this
places
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place
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 is not
for
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apply
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free, you must spend a lot of money, you must buy some books
for
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to
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 prepare,
sometimes
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and sometimes
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people
 choose online courses. Learning
language
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a language
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 for most
people
 is not simple, they spend plenty of time. Often suffer our closer
people
, family and friends because we do not have enough time for spending
times
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time
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 with them.
To sum up
, I think if you are
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an ambition
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ambition
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ambitious
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 person you can do everything. Learning a new
language
 is
hard
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the hard
a hard
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 way, you must choose for yourself.
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