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In some countries, parents spend very little free time with their children. Why is this the case? Who affected more by this, children or parents?

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Nowadays,
parents
 allocate negligible
time
 to their
children
. The reason behind
this
 lack of attention could be deliberate or unintentional, meanwhile, I believe
children
 might expose to more serious risks than
parents
. There are some reasons why today's
parents
 have less contact with their
children
. The main reason might be they often seek financial stability by working a lot. To be more precise,
parents
 sometimes devastate themselves
into
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 their tasks or even are obliged to do overtime. Through
this
 practice, they spend significant
time
 on their work to earn more money and create a stable living status for their
children
. Another potential reason is that some
parents
 prioritize personal enjoyment over their adolescent's needs. They often surf the net or spend
time
 with friends consciously rather than pay attention to their home responsibilities.
Hence
, these
parents
 might have fewer opportunities to spend
time
 with their
children
.
As a result
 of the aforementioned reasons, I would argue that
children
 may damage higher than adults
following
this
 ignorance. As
children
 are in a vital developmental period, they might experience some social issues and psychological problems because the youngsters imitate
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parent's
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behaviors
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 as
role
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 model and probably will do it when they grow up.
For example
, boys accurately assess their father's acts in social aspects, interpersonal relationships and law-abiding and do it reciprocally in the future.
Furthermore
,
children
 need more emotional support since they are at the highest level of dependency on their
parents
.
Therefore
, a lack of attention to
children
 might bring emotional problems
such
 as ADHD or depression in childhood. In conclusion, in some areas, people devote themselves to other responsibilities other than parental roles because of financial needs or being
self-centered
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.
However
,
children
 are at a higher likelihood of risk than
parents
 regarding social and psychological problems.
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