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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages to having a car than its advantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

#people #car
There
have
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 always been a lasting is related to having a
car
.Some say there are some pros,
while
 others are doubtful about it and they cons than pros.
Firstly
, there are things that should be mentioned as benefits of having a
car
 are if
person
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the person
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 who has a
car
, it helps to get somewhere very easily and more quickly. The main reason
of
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for
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 it is getting a
car
 gives you the freedom to commute anywhere you need to.If you lead a busy life like a bee, a
car
 can make your life so much easier.
Second
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 point is that when you own an automobile one of the benefits of privacy. If you
never
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 in one place for too long, your
car
 can serve you as your home. Turning to the drawbacks,it can be proved that the cost of a
car
 is the biggest
disadventage
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disadvantage
 for most buyers. If it new or used
a
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car
, you are still going to need to pay for maintenance costs. There are
also
car
 fees,
such
 as monthly
payment
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payments
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, an interest
rate
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rates
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 and insurance premiums to consider.
Additionally
,more accidents will be in cars rather than
other
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in other
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 vehicles.
For example
,
car
 accidents
are
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increased sharply
in
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this
 year.
Furthermore
,driving a
car
 can lead to
go
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 up in pollution,
for
instance
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 many people using a
car
it
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which
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 means
a
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plenty of cars
in
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on
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 the road and it will
be
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bring out
bumper to bumper
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bumper-to-bumper
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 traffic jams and accidents.
To conclude
, there are clear beneficial points,
however
,
it
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they
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 can not be ignored the cons, as the coin has two sides. There are many
adventages
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advantages
 of getting a
car
while
,
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 there are a lot of
disadventages
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disadvantages
 as well.
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