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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
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Some
people
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 believe that
taxes
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 for supporting the
education
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system
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 must not be forced on parents who send their offspring to private
schools
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. I cannot agree with
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 statement. In my opinion, it is not a fair idea. Paying
taxes
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 gives an opportunity of accessing to the public
education
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 to all youngsters through the development of
schools
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 and colleges. First of all, paying
taxes
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 helps to develop a better
education
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system
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 for all groups of society. The government could build new
schools
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 in poorer parts of the country and improve the quality of
education
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.
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, in Iran, we have several states
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 as Sistan where
people
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 do not have enough budget to send their offspring to private institutes. So, the government should develop public
schools
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 to observe educational justice and free access to higher
education
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 for all juveniles.
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 why all
people
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 including rich households should pay
taxes
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 for
education
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 because those
taxes
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 constitute a significant part of developing the educational
system
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.
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, if wealthy
people
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 do not pay
taxes
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 for the
education
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system
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 the main cost of developing
schools
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 falls on the shoulder of poor families. Unfortunately, most of that families cannot afford to pay that amount of
taxes
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 for their children, and youngsters are forced to leave school.
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, society will lose numerous talents from these children who could serve their country in the future.
To sum up
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, paying
taxes
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 for the
education
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system
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 facilitates the development of
schools
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 and colleges and all juveniles can continue their studies.
In contrast
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, Non-payment of educational
taxes
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 by wealthy families slows down the development of
schools
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, especially in the poorer areas, and many children are deprived of
education
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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