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In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hairstyles. In your opinion, what is influencing this? Is it a good or a bad thing?

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Not in some countries, but in most countries,
people
, especially young
people
 are chasing the most fashionable hairstyles and clothes. The public sometimes asserts that following fashion could be interpreted as an act of hedonism. What elements influence
this
?
This
 situation is complicated by many factors and can
also
 lead to practical arguments for a long time. 
Firstly
, the economics of human beings' history and the wealth of modern society developed rapidly after WWII. Some things that used to be out of reach for ordinary
people
 are now affordable. Despite the cost, in any measure, pursuing fashion and beauty is the basic right of mankind.
For example
, after 40 years of political and economic reforms, the Chinese can now buy what they want that they could hardly imagine before.
On the other hand
, keeping up with the latest trends relies on the popularisation of the Internet and smartphones. Popularity seekers can access social networks to watch celebrities' lives and outfits every single day.
Although
 most
people
 cannot afford to live as debaucherously as stars, it is a person's choice. New research in England is a suitable example; over 90% of British teenagers confirm that they will buy the latest fashionable things they cannot afford, like CDs, electrical devices, and other cool things.
However
, when we are arguing about
this
 topic: 'Is it a good or bad thing?' We should definitely be very cautious. Everyone has their perspective and specific circumstances about how to choose a lifestyle. There is no standard answer to
this
 question. Pursuing the vogue could have a tragic consequence, but ultimately sometimes evokes a normal living soul to become a hero who gets benefits from pursuing the dream constantly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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