The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph gives information about how many people joined various major

sports

in some

area

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areas

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for over 20 years

started

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starting

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from 1997. In general, almost all major

sports

have

Correct article usage

an increase

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increase

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increased

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trend, except cricket.

Moreover

, gentle walking was the most

favorite

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favourite

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sports

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sport

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among others from 1997 to 2017. There

are

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a difference in

number

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a number

the number

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of people who participate in major

sports

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1997 and 2017. In 1997, gentle walking have the highest

participants

Correct quantifier usage

number of participants

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compared to other

sports

with 50,000

participant

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participants

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This

number continues to increase and reach 55,000

participant

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participants

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in 2017.

On the other hand

, cricket

have

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has

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to go through a significant decrease

during

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over

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20 years from more than 35,000 joiners to below 10,000 joiners.

Beside

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Besides

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gentle walking, there are basketball, football, and hiking

that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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also

gained popularity in

this periods

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this period

these periods

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of time. Other

sports

like jogging and

aerobic

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aerobics

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has

Correct subject-verb agreement

have

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not changed much from 1997 to 2017 with participant around 33,000 people.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

152 words

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Topic Vocabulary:

participation rates
adult demographic
comparison
percent change
significant increase/decrease
trend analysis
sports popularity
ranking changes
general patterns
social factors
20-year period
time span
major sports
data interpretation
highlight features

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