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The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts the number of carbon emissions which
is
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 categorized
to
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 six different nations. The report surveyed in 1975, 1990 and 2005. In general, all of the
country
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countries
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 have
positive
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a positive
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 trend
year
 by
year
,
whereas
 only data in Germany stabilized and had a downward tendency in the
last
year
. In detail, in
USA
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the USA
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, the proportion of carbon
emission
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emissions
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 increased sharply from approximately 12000000 to 16000000 metric tonnes in the
last
 period.
Similarly
, China followed a similar pattern
with
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USA
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the USA
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, which increased significantly from around 300000 to 700000 in the following
year
,
then
 continued to
had
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 a gradual rose until 15000000 in 2005. The United Kingdom, Canada, and India,
also
 accumulated carbon emissions over time between 1975 and 2005.
In addition
, the lowest amount of emission in 1975 was India which showed 1500000,
while
 the highest emission for all of the period was
USA
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the USA
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.
On the other hand
, only Germany's report
that
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has
the
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 contrast pattern. In 1975, the survey indicated 2500000,
then
 experienced fairly remained unchanged in 1990. Unfortunately,
this
 trend did not
last
 long and began to worsen in 2005 until 1750000 metric tonnes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • bar graph
  • trends
  • analyze
  • significant changes
  • emission levels
  • steady increase/decrease
  • comparisons
  • summarize
  • range
  • over time
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • fossil fuels
  • industrial activity
  • data interpretation
  • chart analysis
  • megatons
  • climate change
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