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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since computer technology is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #time #computer #technology #functions
Nowadays,
the
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computer
 technology is quite advanced than before with high speed and large memory space. It is assumed that the existence of
this
 technology can replace the functions of public
libraries
 to avoid a waste of
time
 to maintain them. I disagree with the idea because
in
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 my opinion,
computer
technique
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 can not absolutely possess all the functions which public
libraries
 have. Not all the
people
 have knowledge or
time
 to use the
computer
 freely. Many old
people
 don’t know how to search for information
in
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computer
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 or even use it, but they can go directly to public
libraries
 for finding
books
what
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 they need. Many students should study at school for a long
time
 a day. They don’t have much
time
 to read
books
 using
computer
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a computer
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 at home.
However
, they can borrow
books
in
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 public
libraries
 to read them at any
time
. Public
libraries
 can serve more
people
 than computers do.
Besides
, there
are
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 too much information on the Internet. The one who
want
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 to search for some e-
books
in
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on
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computer
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the computer
a computer
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 may be disturbed by advertisements and wrong information.
Time
 would be taken up by them. But
books
 in
libraries
 are located in their special places where can be found easily by readers.
People
 will not worry about finding what they want for a long
time
. All in all, both public
libraries
 and e-book
libraries
 should be selected
by
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readers’
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readers
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 own.
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