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The table below gives information on cmsumer spending items in four different countries in zoa. Of national consumer expenditure by category 2008

The table below gives information on cmsumer spending items in four different countries in zoa. Of national consumer expenditure by category 2008
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The given table illustrates
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the percentage of spending
of
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national users spent on particular items in four different countries in 2008.
Overall
, all
of
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nations
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the nations
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 had the highest point on consuming fast
food
/ drinks
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leisure activities/ education. There are no significant differences in consumer expenditure in
Thailand
 and Vietnam on fast
food
 and leisure
activites
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activities
/education and
Japan
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 with Vietnam in shoes / watches. The proportion of consumer expenditure
in
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 fast
food
 belongs to China
with
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 28,91%,
highest
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 in four countries and three categories, higher than that of
Thailand
13.55
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%.
Additionally
,
shoes
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/
watches
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watch
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 spending in
Thailand
also
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 lower than
China
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in China
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 was 5.93% and 16.23% respectively.
While
,the figure for user investment
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 leisure activities/ education in China was 2.21%,compared to
Thailand
 with 3.2% The amount of money spent on fast
food
/ drinks in Japan was 18.8%
while
 Vietnamese just consumed 15.77%,
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 in three categories but
lowest
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the lowest
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 in four countries. There was a similar in Japan and Vietnamese in spending
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 shoes/ watches with 0.11% differences. Japanese spent money a little
with
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 1.98%
while
 Vietnamese has the highest ones with 3.22%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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