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Some people believe that written communication is much less powerful than face to face interaction when it comes to conveying a message. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemant?

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Through
communication
, people can pass and give information to others, either written or oral, some people think that written
communication
 is less powerful than personal
interaction
 when it comes to conveying a
message
. I agree
to
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 the view that oral
interaction
 is stronger to give
informations
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information
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 than written
,
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 since it can give the other person a sense of sincerity
through out
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throughout
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 the
conversation
. On one hand, written
communication
 can give a good
message
,
however
, there is always a possibility of miscommunication, since the tone of the voice is lacking,
as well as
,
the
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facial expressions,
that is
 very essential in portraying a
message
 to
other
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others
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.
Furthermore
,
their
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 is
lack
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a lack
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 of
instantenous
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instantaneous
 feedback from the one
recieving
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receiving
message
,
for instance
 in sending emails, there is no direct feedback from the
reciever
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receiver
that
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which
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 can cause
communication
 delay. Unlike in oral
interaction
, the answer is directly given which makes it more
convenience
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.
In addition
,
face to
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face-to-face
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face
interaction
 is stronger since there is
direct
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a direct
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conversation
, where all the questions and queries can be answered at the same moment,
moreover
 clarifications and
respond
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responses
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is
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are
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 directly
recieved
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received
.
Besides
 when talking to the person directly, there is a chance to determine their reactions, which is crucial in the
conversation
 to know how sincere their answer to the given questions
and
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is and
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 if they are really interested in talking. Being true in engaging
conversation
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 will give satisfaction
in
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to
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 both
person
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people
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, where only seen in
face to
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face-to-face
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face
conversation
. In conclusion, even though written
communication
 is less powerful, it is
also
 crucial in other ways like
writting
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writing
 a formal letter or email,
whereas
face to
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face-to-face
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face
interaction
 is stronger in portraying
message
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the message
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 in the case of
oral
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an oral
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 panel
interview
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interviews
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 and
deep
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deeply
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 personal
conversation
,
however
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,however
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 both ways of
comminication
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communication
 is very useful.
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