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you are getting married write a letter to an English speaking friend to invite him or her to the wedding. describe who you are to marry tell what will happen on the wedding day explain why it is important for him or her at the wedding.

Dear Shan, How have you been? It's been a
while
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 since we
last
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 caught up. I wanted to let you know that
i
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I
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 just had to drop you a line and share some exciting news. I am getting married next month. First of all, let
you
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me
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 introduce you to my
groom to be
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groom-to-be
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. Do you remember who the lucky person is? Anchal, my childhood friend, is someone I often talk about at college with you. Yes, the long-awaited day has arrived in my life that I imagined it to be. and for
that
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 We had planned the wedding at home in India. Wedding day starts always in India with
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a dance
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 and music night always and
then
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next
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the next
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 day we will
have
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 get
together with
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 both families to know each other. After that whole week, many traditional and famous rituals will be there. And
then
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 on 28th January, I will marry
buddy
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my buddy
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 to my love. Well, you
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a
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me a
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lot during hard
time
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times
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 after reaching Canada and You
always
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 there for me. I've always wanted to celebrate my wedding with close friends, so you have to come
her
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here
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 my friend. On top of that, you will get a chance to explore and enjoy India with me. I'd already planned a trip before marriage with all our roommates. I'd already reserved
a tickets
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tickets
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 and
taxi
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a taxi
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 to my home. I would love to see you soon. Take care and write back. Your loving friend, Ashutosh Parmar

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task achievement
Consider adding more details about the wedding venue and specific events planned to enhance the descriptive aspect of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Arrange the paragraph about wedding plans in a more chronological sequence to improve clarity.
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You've used a warm and personal tone throughout the letter, which is very appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-structured and friendly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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