Some people think parents should supervise their children’s activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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others believe that Add the comma(s)
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This
essay will discuss both views and provide a conclusion.
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parents
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are
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give a negative impact on them to consume drugs and use abusive language .
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builds
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requirement
parents
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children
thier
own space to succeed and Correct your spelling
their
passionate
in life .
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importance
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the importance
children
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apply
decipline
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discipline
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