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The two pictures compare the layout of a school as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024

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Overall
, the
school
 will become more developed, cutting out a little area of
park
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while
 extending more
school
 buildings and roads because of the increase in students. In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the
school
, and the two
school
 buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. In 2024, the number of pupils will increase by 400, and
the
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school
 building 1 will connect to
the
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school
 building 2.
In addition
, in 2024, there will have a road
that
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stretching
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 from the main entrance to car park 2, which is newly erected. Because of
a
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 increase
of
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 students, one more
school
 building will be constructed to replace the location of the sports field, and it will be removed next to the road, near the car park 2.
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