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Some of the local languages are becoming extinct. What are the advantages and disadvantages? Write at least 250 words.

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There are some advantages and disadvantages of local languages that as disappeared. It might be good for
foreign
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the foreign
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policy
 of the
country
, not for domestic
policy
.
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 with advantages of becoming extinct for local languages of countries that
communication
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 with other countries
on
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 English. Because it
considered
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is considered
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 like
world’s
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the world’s
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language
. Important
policy
 negotiations and
out of
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apply
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policy
 which are can benefit the
country
. Their
language
they
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apply
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can use only within
own
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their own
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country
. So communication with another
country
 helps to increase
economy
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the economy
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. Disadvantages
more
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are more
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 important with humanity side. People forget about their languages, and because of
this
, the culture and history of their nation.
For
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 some African countries
which
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language
extincted
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extinct
. They speak
on
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in
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 English or
on
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in
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 French.
New
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The new
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 generation grows up with thoughts of a learn another culture and
country
’s
language
, by forgot own history. Extinct
procces
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processes
 of local
language
 have benefits and harms to
country
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the country
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. In conclusion, people should understand the problem, and
controle
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control
 the situation.
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