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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In education,
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computer
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computers
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 are being widely used to teach
students
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 in many
school
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schools
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. Some people say that using
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computer
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a computer
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 in education is necessary, but others say that
computers
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 should not be used because it adversely affects
students
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. In terms of benefits, the use of
computers
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 in education is that it helps
students
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 know how the
computer
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 works, how to program the system and know about the information of the world.
Students
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 can use
computers
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 to study online,
chat
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and chat
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 with friends to solve
the
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homework,
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, they can
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 search for information about
the
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other countries,
recipes
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and recipes
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,… on google.
On the other hand
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,
computers
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 are
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 not entirely beneficial. Using
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computer
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a computer
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 for too long can lead to
eyes
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 diseases
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 as myopia,
it
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and it
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 can
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 cause insomnia if you watch
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computer
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the computer
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 before
bed time
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bedtime
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.
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The computer
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Computer
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Computers
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also
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make
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 users addicted to social networks, they will always spend a lot of time
to watch
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watching
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 tik tok,
facebook
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 and forget what they need to do. In short, whether using a
computer
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 is beneficial or harmful depends on how people use it, we need to know how to
seclet
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select
 the good content and avoid
from
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bad content or ads.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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