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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Living in big
cities
 may be ideal for some
people
 as there are more job opportunities, more places to hang out and frequent public transportation.
However
, living in
such
cities
 endangers the health of the
people
 who reside there. In
this
 ,
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essay I will share my thoughts on the matter. The amount of vehicles that drive in big
cities
 is greater than in other places
such
 as small towns or villages. The reason why there are many vehicles in big
cities
 is that there are many residents. Vehicles pollute the air and release substances which are unhealthy to human beings
such
 as carcinogens which promote the growth of cancer cells.
In addition
, the rate of accidents in big
cities
 is high because of the lifestyle of the
people
.
For example
,
people
 who are in a rush to get to work and shift workers who drive late at night. Those accidents can result in loss of lives and
also
 can cause permanent disability.
On the other hand
, living in a big city can be life-saving in some cases.
For example
, a person who experiences a heart attack is supposed to get treatment as soon as possible. A resident of a big city is likely to be brought to the hospital quicker than a resident who lives in a small town. I agree with the statement that living in big
cities
 is bad for
people
's health.
However
, almost every day there are
people
 who need emergent care and living in a big city may rescue them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • overcrowding
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • work pressures
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • lack of exercise
  • pandemics
  • green spaces
  • affordability
  • healthcare services
  • recreational facilities
  • cosmopolitan
  • diversity
  • personal development
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