You ordered an equipment online. However, when you received, it was damaged. Send a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter, you should tell:giving the details about the equipmentexplain the damagesuggest what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Manager I ordered a grey colour Macbook

laptop

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through the official Apple website

last

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week and it has arrived yesterday.

This

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laptop

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is for my mother's birthday gift and cost me two thousand dollars.

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, there was

big

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hole

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package

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the package

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when I received it. After

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opened it and checked the

laptop

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clearly, I found that the screen has already been damaged and

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can not turn it on. There

are

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also

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some

scratch

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on the back of the

laptop

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. I already took some pictures and put them in the attachment. Without a doubt, it was

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damaged

before

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received it.

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, Can I apply

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for a

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refund for

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and I will deliver it back to your company? I will send my bank account information in another email. My mother's birthday is next

friday

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Friday

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so I can not wait for you to change a new one for me. Thank you very much kind regards

kim

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Kim

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chenkaixu9119Mon Jan 30 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

157 words

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Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone’s benefits. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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