the graph belows shows the percentage of households woth different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.

the graph belows shows the percentage of households woth different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.
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The line graph compares the proportion of
families
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with five types of appliances in the US between 1995 to 1999. It is clear from the line graph that the washing machine was the most popular household appliance in the US over these 4 years.
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, the
percentage
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of American households that used
phones
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saw a considerable increase. In 1995, 60% of
families
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in the US used washing machines,
then
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the figure rose steadily to 80%
at the end
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of
this
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period. The
percentage
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of households with computers saw a similar trend during
this
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time, from 40% in 1995 to 70% in 1999. The
percentage
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of American
families
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who owned DVD players,
phones
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and the Internet started at 25%, 19% and 10% respectively in 1995. Between 1995 and 1996, the population using DVD players witnessed a considerable decline and reached its lowest point (at 15%),
while
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the figure for
families
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with
phones
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and internet increased slightly to 20% and around 19%. After 1998, the
percentage
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of households with
phones
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and the Internet rose rapidly, reaching 75% and 50% each by 1999,
while
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the figure for
families
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that used DVD players was just 40%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, percentage, phones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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