the graph belows shows the percentage of households woth different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.

the graph belows shows the percentage of households woth different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999.
The line graph compares the proportion of
families
with five types of appliances in the US between 1995 to 1999. It is clear from the line graph that the washing machine was the most popular household appliance in the US over these 4 years.
Also
, the
percentage
of American households that used
phones
saw a considerable increase. In 1995, 60% of
families
in the US used washing machines,
then
the figure rose steadily to 80%
at the end
of
this
period. The
percentage
of households with computers saw a similar trend during
this
time, from 40% in 1995 to 70% in 1999. The
percentage
of American
families
who owned DVD players,
phones
and the Internet started at 25%, 19% and 10% respectively in 1995. Between 1995 and 1996, the population using DVD players witnessed a considerable decline and reached its lowest point (at 15%),
while
the figure for
families
with
phones
and internet increased slightly to 20% and around 19%. After 1998, the
percentage
of households with
phones
and the Internet rose rapidly, reaching 75% and 50% each by 1999,
while
the figure for
families
that used DVD players was just 40%.
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