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Should young people follow the older people’s examples or it’s good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both the views and give your

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Nowadays, many adults believe the parent in order to older population can’t determine one but
also
 to get advice
to
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 adults is very irrational,
however
, others think obeying from the old crowds
such
 as retired teachers and any experienced parent must be useful for anybody whit fewer
experiences
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experience
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. We’ll discuss both views on the issue activity explained them in be explained them in the following statements.
For instance
, with regard to developing technology and knowledge in
this
 country anywhere you can access a specialist and solve your problem very quickly.,
Moreover
 in
this
 period of ,time citizens do their activity
according to
 duty. I believe giving a style of life from them because of the old determinable .power and authority of the public very soon will be demolished. First of all, any parent because of their spiritual need like to advise all. The factual human mind doesn’t need to one for selecting its path in life.
Thus
, they need to appreciate better than the moment older people think become retired and their experience is enough for young employees in order to structure the office. In conclusion, we could say the youngest learns about the experiences of an older man or woman. ,
Also
 it becomes better if the government support needs of older people in society and build an institution for transferring
this
 experience to the next generation. ,
However
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 all of these activities in society are related to becoming a communication for solving both older and younger people by consulting with them and it is possible for our citizens and really countries
need
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to need
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 these kinds of social help.
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