Some people think that Information technologies have more disadvantages than advatages. To what extent do you agree?

It is undeniable that
information
technologies
have important to living mostly,
such
as
internet
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the internet
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system
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systems
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able
search
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to search
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interesting
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for interesting
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information
easily and payment able transfer money through
the
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an
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app
by
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apply
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mustn't transfer through the bank.
Information
technologies
make
better
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a better
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convenient living
,
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but have disadvantages.
for example
, to cause some accounting officer is fired from routine
work
because
people
can
use
ATM
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ATMs
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for
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to
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deposit and withdraw money.
Computer
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The computer
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is one of the best examples which prove how
information
technologies
have more advantages than disadvantages. It is essential that support us since search
information
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for information
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for learning or writing
report
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reports
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until
use
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used
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to working. Some
student
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students
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learn at inconvenient
for
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apply
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education
such
as have
not
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book
and
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teacher enough to
teaching
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,
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until they were supported
from
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by
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the government
set
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and set
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up with internet system for learning through
online
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an online
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class
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classes
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.
Moreover
, there is
also
a system that reduces typing errors, resulting in reduced
work
time.
Similarly
, in the side of medicine the involvement of
technologies
able
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increase
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to increase
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the
patients'
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patient's
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chances of
recovering
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recovery
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. Some
people
are born with
physical
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a physical
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abnormality
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abnormalities
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that
make
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makes
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them unable to live like normal
people
,
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apply
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until
technologies
come to the rescue to make them
to
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apply
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live
a
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apply
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better life.
For example
, hearing aids for the deaf.
In contrast
,
information
technologies
are easily accessible to make some
people
is
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are
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deceived to give personal
information
to bad
person
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people
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use
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illegality.
Furthermore
, there is role-play be
call-center
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call-centre
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call
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calling
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someone
for
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to
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deceive to take money which is news recently. Most companies
use
a large number of
technologies
for
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to
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reduce
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reducing
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time
in
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apply
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working to increase
quality
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the quality
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of better
work
,
thus
there
are
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is
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fire someone for decrease
finance
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the finance
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of
company
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the company
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to
be spend
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be spent
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on enhancing
the
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apply
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better
information
technologies
. In
conclude
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conclusion
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,
Information
technologies
have
important
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an important
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role in
support
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supporting
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living
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the living
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of
people
to be convenient in terms of education,
work
, and
medical
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medicine
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.
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