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In the 21st century, many women have come out of their home to become what we call working women. What are the advantages and disadvantages of women joining the workforce?

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We are in an era that many things have evolved rapidly. With
this
 rapid growth, feminism came into the picture. They have been given equality as men do, and
as a result
, they are involved in every industry. It is clearer that most
women
 have stepped out
from
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 their
home
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 and started to work in
this
 century.
Women
 who joined the workforce, have
became
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 a
contravarsal
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controversial
 topic in
the
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society.
Specially
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 regarding the advantages and disadvantages.
This
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discuss
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 both aspects with examples.
Employeed
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Employed
women
 certainly consider
as
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a benefit in
current
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the current
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 competitive society, as monetary value
become
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 the highest priority. For an instance, if a family migrated to another country,
first
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 few months will be challenging. There are some cases
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 men cannot earn enough money to feed their spouses,but having
a working
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working women
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women
 in the family
,
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 would make things
bit
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easeir
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easier
.
Also
, having
a
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diversity in a working environment is highly productive. A good example would be teachers.
Women
 can deal with children more than men does. Every coin has two sides.
Similarly
,
above
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 statement has disadvantages too. The reason I am mentioning
that is
 it will reduce the bond of the family. A mother
consider
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as
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the backbone of a family. As an example, if both parents
working
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, it
affect
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for
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their
children
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children's
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 mentality and personal growth.
Consequently
, children could get depressed or stubborn as they don't have their parents to associate with.
Furthermore
, there can be situations
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that
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where
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women
 get harmed or abused by others at work. in result
mental
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 health and
few
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a few
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 other problems that could occur in their life. In a nutshell,
women
 doing a job is becoming a trend. There are plenty of female figures who
sits
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 on top chairs in various industries.
However
, both males and females should
analize
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analyse
 before deciding to do a job, when they are having family responsibilities. If they can do their jobs
while
 handling the house responsibilities, it would be a win-win
situations
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situation
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