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Some people think that Information technologies have more disadvantages than advatages. To what extent do you agree?

#people #information #technologies #advatages
It is undeniable that
information
technologies
 have important to living mostly,
such
 as the internet systems able to search for interesting
information
 easily and payment able transfer money through an app mustn't transfer through the bank.
Information
technologies
 make a better convenient living but have disadvantages.
for example
, to cause some accounting officer is fired from routine
work
 because
people
 can use ATMs to deposit and withdraw money. The computer is one of the best examples which
prove
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 how
information
technologies
 have more advantages than disadvantages. It is essential that support us
since
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in
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 search for
information
 for learning or writing reports until used to working. Some students learn at inconvenient education
such
 as
have
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having
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tonot
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to not
 book
teacher
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teachers
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 enough to teach
,
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apply
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 until they were supported by the government and set up with
internet
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an internet
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 system for learning through
an
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apply
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online classes.
Moreover
, there is
also
 a system that reduces typing errors, resulting in reduced
work
 time.
Similarly
, in the side of
medicine
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,medicine
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 the involvement of
technologies
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technology
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 is able to increase the patient's chances of recovery. Some
people
 are born with
a physical abnormalities
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physical abnormalities
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 that
makes
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make
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 them unable to live like normal
people
,
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 until
technologies
 come to the rescue to make them live
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a
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better
life
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lives
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.
For example
, hearing aids for the deaf.
In contrast
,
information
technologies
 are easily accessible to make some
people
are
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deceived to give personal
information
 to bad
people
 using illegality.
Furthermore
, there is role-play
be
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in be
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 call-centre calling someone to deceive to take money which is news recently. Most companies use a large number of
technologies
 to
reducing
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 time working to increase the quality of better
work
,
thus
 there is
fire
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a fire
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someone
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for someone
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for
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to
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 decrease the finance of the company to be spent on enhancing better
information
technologies
. In conclusion,
Information
technologies
 have an important role in supporting the living of
people
 to be convenient in terms of education,
work
, and medicine.
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