Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

Nowadays plenty of students
after
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high school
going
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to
univeristy
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university
. In my
country
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,country
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we have
diffrents
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different
options and
diploma
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diplomas
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. The two most popular option to study is from
monday
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to
friday
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Friday
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and the other is studying only in the weekends. I was that kind of student. Now young people move from
small
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a small
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village
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villages
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to cities or towns. They rent a room or flat with
ther
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their
friends, it is cheaper than
rent
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renting
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alone. A lot of students study
in
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at
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weekends and work in
week
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the week
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for example
half time job. In my opinion it is very mature
,
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because young
citziens
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citizens
learn independence. Private studies
is
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are
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expensive than public in my country, for
parents
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,parents
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it is easier. If
student
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a student
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don't
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doesn't
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come from
rich
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a rich
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family he or she must
woking
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wok
be woking
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.
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  • mature
  • responsibility
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • organizational skills
  • career exploration
  • financial independence
  • work ethic
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