Do you think it is better for students to work before their university study? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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Nowadays plenty of students

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high school

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univeristy

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. In my

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we have

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options and

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. The two most popular option to study is from

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and the other is studying only in the weekends. I was that kind of student. Now young people move from

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village

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to cities or towns. They rent a room or flat with

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friends, it is cheaper than

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alone. A lot of students study

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weekends and work in

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for example

half time job. In my opinion it is very mature

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because young

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citizens

learn independence. Private studies

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expensive than public in my country, for

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it is easier. If

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don't

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come from

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family he or she must

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