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Scholarships are a great opportunity to gain the study you like. What are the main advantages or disadvantages of studying abroad?

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In today's perpetually transforming epoch , an increasing number of families like to
study
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 abroad.It is opined by many people that
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 scholarships, folk can
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 whatever they want. I have discussed the merits and demerits of
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 trend in the upcoming paragraphs. Commencing with the advantage side , first and foremost better job opportunities.Nowadays a number of people are preferring to
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 abroad.
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 , foreign countries have better education institutions with pragmatic knowledge so students can get a better literacy.
For example
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 , if someone wants to get an education from Cambridge University , they have to go to London.
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 , people can learn how to become independent .To be clear ,when scholars go to foreign countries , they have to live alone .
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 , they learn how to deal with bad circumstances, how time management and responsibilities and other skills.
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 , when a person goes to another country for getting an education,they have to live with other students so they learn collaboration , rapport, teamwork, money management , time management and whatnot. To commence with the disadvantage side , the crowd lost their identity and it leads to a brain drain.
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 ,many students get scholarships from their own countries .After that , they become doctors or engineers. When the time comes to service the country , they go to another country for getting a higher job or to live a luxurious life .
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 , for getting better
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 and job opportunities pupils go abroad and they learn so many skills .
On the other hand
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 , it leads to brain drain.
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