🔶More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. 🔸What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

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In recent years, it is getting popular to hire a personal coach to exercise safely in a gym and
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people
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are more concerned about what they eat because social media are full of articles written about healthy diets. In
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essay, I will express my ideas briefly. On the hand, because the economy has increased and technology has developed,
people
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can afford a better life, and get more information about health. There are several ways to help
people
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get motivation on doing sports and eat well.
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, many social platforms support influencers to record their daily, including the activities they do
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sports or the meals they prepare in general
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doing exercise. to inspire followers to keep doing on their way.
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, influencers
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create
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chat groups to make their fans able to discuss with others.
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, they may have common problems
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cooking or some difficulties in participating in
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activities
, and groups can support them
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the upset period.
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, it is an important part of education within the lessons at school and with families. Though everyone will learn the knowledge at school or
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online platforms, it is better to encourage
people
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to follow in a natural way which they can easily do at home.
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, if every family can join and do it together
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as exercise and prepare a healthy diet, it will be a successful sample. In conclusion, even though
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start from different reasons and steps, it makes things easier when they do it with groups they share their
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and
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each other.
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