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In some countries people rent accommodation while other buy their own houses. Does renting accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages than buying place?

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People
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 exactly must have a
house
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 as a convenient place to spend their leisure time with their family. Nowadays, some
people
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 tend to
rent
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 a
house
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,
while
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 others prefer to buy their own accommodation.
This
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 essay agrees that renting a
house
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 is a wise choice for
people
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 who do not want to live in a country for a long time.
This
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 essay will discuss practical options as a benefit and continuously rising prices as a drawback.
Firstly
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, every society has a
house
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 because they want to spend their free time from their jobs.
However
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,
according to
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 the job, there are some
people
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 who usually get job placement from their company. Some employees get assigned to work in other cities, even in other countries. A prime example is engineers from construction companies,
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 get a chance to work on sites, which are far from their hometowns. It has resulted that renting a
house
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 is a wise option for
people
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 who want to bring their family to live together.
On the other hand
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, there is a disadvantage if we need to
rent
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 a
house
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. About the price of renting accommodation,
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continually increases over
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 certain period following the rising of land taxes.
For example
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, the cost of renting a mini
house
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 in Jakarta is the most expensive among big cities in Indonesia. It has resulted in the small family is not able to pay the
rent
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 and they decide to live in their parents'
house
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.
To conclude
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, the benefit of renting a
house
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is
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that is
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 suitable for
people
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 who go abroad to other places must outweigh the drawback, which is the expensive cost of renting accommodation. As long as
society
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a society
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 afford to
rent
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 a
house
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, the option is still needed.
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