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The wealth gap between 1st world countries and 3rd world countries seems to be increasing. How can we reduce this gap? Do you think that developed countries have a duty to assist developing countries in every way?

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It is commonly thought that there is a huge growing economic difference between the most developed and developing
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. Some people believe that 1st world
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 ought to provide help to 3rd world
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. in my opinion the wealth gap must be reduced by providing help to undeveloped territories.
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 with, the most noticeable reason why the difference exists is that the state is considered economically stable
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 there is a high level of education and no unemployment.
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, to decrease poverty there is a need to provide more universities and free schools for everyone,
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, there will be more highly qualified workers.
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, to create the ideal world where all people have equal rights despite their nation, the USA,
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, may help Moldovia to build more institutes and fund them.
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, they can provide more workplaces as
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' economy is directly connected with the rate of unemployment.
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, if the most powerful territories want to have their place they may help others with food, clothes and other vital features.
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, the growing wealth gap may scare the government, but there are ways to stop
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 trend and find a way for others to increase their economy.
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