Some people think all lawbreakers should be put into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.”

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A section of society believes that
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should be kept behind
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, the remaining masses suggest some constructive plans.
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in my opinion offenders should be kept in prison as per the
law
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. To commence with, the main reason to place
criminals
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behind
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is to set an example so that city dwellers can strictly follow the
law
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.
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, if a criminal after committing the crime
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in jail,
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people will not break the
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and avoid illegal activities
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as theft, wrong driving, smuggling etc.
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, a recent survey by "The
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Times" in Dubai states that
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keeping offenders in jail, the crime rate in the city has been reduced to 70% which is a remarkable achievement.
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, in my opinion, to sustain peace and
law
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,
criminals
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should be placed behind
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On the other hand
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, some people opine that there should be other methods to treat
criminals
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rather than prison. one
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effective method is to charge heavy fines against them.
Due to
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this
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action masses will follow laws and will not commit any offence. To cite an example, a recent report by Oxford University reveals that
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heavy penalties against crime, 50% of offenders quit illegal activities and become normal citizens.
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Government should apply heavy fines against
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. In conclusion,
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, huge penalties can be applied against
criminals
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, In my point of view, to sustain peace and
law
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,
criminals
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should be placed behind
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