The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart gives a comparison of purchasing and drinking habits of
coffee
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and tea in five different cities in Australia in recent
last
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four weeks time frame. As is observed, Australians tend to have their
coffee
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or tea in a cafe more than just buying it from
coffee
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houses.
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, they are inclined to buy instant
coffee
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more than fresh ones. The highest number for having
coffee
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or tea in a cafe is accounted for the Hobart and Melbourne people, both with around 64 per cent.
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, Sydney ranks the second highest amount with almost 61%.
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Hobart is the highest amount for taking instant
coffee
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from a
coffee
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house, Brisbane ranked the second highest figure for it. Regarding the figures for giving information about purchasing fresh
coffee
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, Sydney and Melbourne recorded the highest percentage with just about 44% and roughly 43 per cent respectively.
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, Brisbane's proportion for
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figure is slightly under 35 per cent.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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