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Some people believe that climate has the greatest effect on people ‘s way of life. Others believe that the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both view and give you own opinion.

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While
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 few
people
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 think that
weather
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 has an eminent effect on an individual's path in
life
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,others consider that wealth has a substantial effect.I believe that
climate
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 has the most effect on one's
life
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. On the one hand,there are
people
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 who opine that
weather
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 plays a significant role in
people
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's
life
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 because they are experiencing severe effects of
climate
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 change.
According to
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 them,slowly changing
weather
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 conditions,rising sea levels and other extreme
weather
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 events are devastating.It is commonly believed that there are
people
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 who struggle to earn money,support their families and build a stable home,
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 is getting harder every day as the
climate
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 crisis continues.
On the other hand
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,there are others who think that wealth is playing a major role in the region because in
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 modern ,era everything is dependent on the economy ,
For instance
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 :If a person wants to leave a healthy and happy
life
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 they need more wealth for that .To raise the economy government is struggling by keeping taxes and GST on the economy. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views,
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 believe that
climate
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 has the greatest involvement in a person's
life
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.
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