Does travel help to promote understanding and communication between countries? what your opinion?

It is true that people understand other
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countries
culture
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cultures
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while
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. I
agree
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this
statement.
To begin
with, it is
diffrent
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different
that
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to other communities in person is more
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that
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than
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watching TV. Sometimes you
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disapoint
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disappoint
some situations when you face meeting
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strangers
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such
as
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rubber
at tourist attractions. You might be
embarassed
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embarrassed
about situations that you
donot
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do not
really expect.
Moreover
, some
accomodations
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accommodation
donot
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do not
meet your
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expectation
expectations
also
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the staff
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are
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kindness
. You might be
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case. Even though it happens
various
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events
traveling
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helps to increase understanding
other
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public and communication
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in person. In my case, I have visited
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Paris in France. I went there with my husband 3 years ago. There are a lot of museums and art galleries
attrcting
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attracting
tourists
also
I watched plenty of artworks
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artbooks and TV. It
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impressed me and
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. It was
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opportuniy
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opportunity
to understand their culture and history. In conclusion, I believe that
traveling
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other
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countries' culture makes people
propmt
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prompt
understanding and communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Cross-cultural interaction
  • Diplomacy
  • Ethnocentrism
  • Globalization
  • Intercultural competence
  • Mutual respect
  • Socioeconomic ties
  • Tourism industry
  • Xenophobia
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