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Topic: Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.

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Many People opine that urban fields are better places to live
in
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because more job options are available in cities rather than in the rural fields,
as well as
 more sources of entertainment are
also
 there.
However
 , there are some drawbacks
also
 to living in big municipalities as cities are too congested and there is too much pollution.
Firstly
, the main advantage of living in an urban field is that there are numerous amount of employment opportunities available. Because all big industries and manufacturing industries are situated in these areas.
Hence
, it is easy for someone to acquire a job in a big metropolis as compared to small towns.
Moreover
, another plus point is the transportation system in the big metropolis is much more accessible. One can easily commute from one region to another region within minutes without wasting time. On the other side, there are some negative points
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to migrating to towns. The first and foremost disadvantage of living in a capital is pollution. As capital is more polluted than rural areas. Because of factories and other production companies.
Consequently
, it is difficult to live in the fresh air
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eat healthily and stay fit in a metropolis.
Furthermore
, the second disadvantage of living in municipalities is competition. there is a lot of stress to survive in these regions.
for instance
, every day you have a new challenge to survive in big cities to how you can do better at the workplace.
To conclude
, Despite there being a lot of benefits of city life
such
 as employment opportunities and transportation systems
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there are some drawbacks
also
 to living in big places like pollution and less space.
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task response advice
Ensure that you clearly address all aspects of the task prompt and present a balanced view of the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.
coherence and cohesion advice
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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