Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In
current
life, Add an article
the current
majority
of kids tend to devote most time of Correct article usage
the majority
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their the
the
day Change the word
their
on
their smartphones. Change preposition
to
This
phenomenon might be occurred due to
some reasons which I assume that they mostly lead to some detrimental consequences. To be precise, it has more drawbacks rather than benefits.
To begin
with, technological advancements and sophisticated gadgets considered
to be interconnected with humanity which Add a missing verb
are considered
have
some negative influence on Change the verb form
has
children
. To illustrate, kids have an
inclination to overuse their cell Change the article
the
phones
due to
not having enough parental supervision. As long as parents are the
role models Correct article usage
apply
of
their Change preposition
for
children
, they should not prioritize work
and Correct pronoun usage
their work
career
of theirs over the behaviour of Fix the agreement mistake
careers
children
. Correct pronoun usage
their children
For example
, they themselves are glued to their phones
and even spend their time off on
scrolling through the internet Change preposition
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instead
of encouraging children
to get involved into
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in
some
sports activities or spend some time out so as to refresh their Correct quantifier usage
apply
mind
. Fix the agreement mistake
minds
Consequently
, children
have an excessive use of smartphones that
follows Correct pronoun usage
which
by
getting addicted to them.
The main results of Change preposition
to
this
phenomenon could be observed in two negative ways. One of which is that,
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children
who are prone to use their phones
excessively, are highly likely to encounter failure in their academic achievement as well as
they can come across difficulties to uphold friendship
with their classmates. Meaning thatFix the agreement mistake
friendships
,
social media and several apps offered by Remove the comma
apply
phones
easily capture attention
of Add an article
the attention
children
, as a result
, they expose themselves to watching videos contain
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containing
a
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apply
violence
or inappropriate content Replace the word
violent
to
their age. Being addicted to them, they are less impossible to neglect their study Change preposition
for
along with
falling behind with syllabus
of their school. Aside from Correct article usage
the syllabus
this
, not getting on well with classmates leads to losing bonds with them which is the result of indifferent teachers who allow pupils to have an access to phones
, even during lessons. Another disadvantage of the given matter is related to health problems that can be obtained by overconsumption such
devices Change preposition
of such
like
cell Change preposition
as
phones
or laptops. That is
to say, it can negatively effect
on mental ability or memory of those Correct your spelling
affect
children
. If, for instance
, they are let to possess phones
from their
early Change the word
an
ages
, they may become grumpy and aggressive, Fix the agreement mistake
age
that
seems Correct pronoun usage
which
as if
normal temper to themselves, as they grow up. Considering all discussed reasons, the elderly, mostly parents and teachers, should make use of controlling Correct word choice
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children
in what way they are using their phones
as well as
putting some restrictions such
as taking their phones
after 8 p.m or checking the websites they mostly pay a visit.
To conclude
, I would claim that most factors leading to detrimental results are due to
unconsciousness
of Correct article usage
the unconsciousness
children
and indifference
of parents. Correct article usage
the indifference
However
, it can be tackled, if people responsible for children
take a
serious consideration of their future and shaping behaviour.Remove the article
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