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Every year several langauges die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some
people
 argue that it is not imperative to have several
languages
 in the
world
 and believe it will be a better
place
 if we have a few
languages
as a result
 a number of them are dying out. In my opinion, having fewer
languages
 will not make the
world
 a better
place
. To start with I believe, Having
people
 use different tongues of communication does not make the
world
 any hard. If the system was to be changed and implemented so that the whole
world
 should use one or two
languages
, a lot of us will find it hard to communicate because we have a variety of nationalities who have specific
languages
 of communication. Many
people
 will fail to adopt it and it will be like going back to kindergarten.
Secondly
,
a
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research that was carried out in America in 2003, shows that most human beings learn better when taught in a language they understand and are familiar with.
Nevertheless
, I think it could have been easier for the new generation because they will not have to switch and let go of their initial language as they will take the uniform one and use it freely. That way the
world
 would be a better
place
 because we would travel freely across the
world
 without fear of not being able to communicate when we get to our destination. In conclusion, the
world
 is a better
place
 with the many
languages
 we have because
people
 are using the mode of communication they are comfortable with.
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