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Some people prefer living in an apartment while others believe living in a house brings more advantages. Which, out of the two, is better?

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In modern cities different types of
houses
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 are available and each residing spot has a few benefits and drawbacks. I would prefer to buy a detached
house
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 which is a less modern apartment and a more traditional
house
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.
In
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 my perspective, living in a regular
house
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 is spacious, independent and comfortable. Multistoried apartments have compromised areas and are crammed. A place where a man can relax is called home. If a person owns a
house
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 as per his/her desires and wants,
then
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 he/she can have fun with his family and friends. Traditional
houses
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 are different buildings with limited touch with the neighbourhood. These traditional
houses
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 have a more private area,
rooms
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 for visitors, a garage, backyards and small compounds.
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 residing in these types of
houses
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 you can manage to park 2 to 4 cars in the
house
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. It is best for the cars’ protection as the cars are going to stay under the roof to avoid any kind of damage. UV rays are a boon from nature and it eradicates bacteria, making the smell disappear from
rooms
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. A person
in
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 the front lawn and backwards can do gardening and enjoy his time. Various flowers which you get to grow in your garden add to the beauty of a
house
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. I wouldn’t prefer to stay in an apartment. These types of small
houses
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 don’t have parking places, separate
rooms
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 for visitors
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 backyards. The
rooms
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 are not spacious and don’t get proper sunlight which affects the health of humans. These kinds of buildings generally have shopping malls and offices on the ground floors that are the source of rush and noise.
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, if there is any kind of activity going on on one floor the above and floor down will have to face discomfort. Old and middle-aged people can not sleep in an environment
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 noisy. You have to pay every month for
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 maintenance fee. That adds to your expenditures. In conclusion, I would say I would prefer to live in a traditional
house
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. Traditional
houses
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 have more open space and are good for family activities. You get your personal space, you can enjoy working out, can make your own garden filled with flowers, enjoy the day without too much noise and get comfortable and better sleep at night.
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