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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.
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The line graph illustrates how much
time
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 it would take for
Company
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 A,
Company
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B
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 and
Company
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C
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 to produce a
refrigerator
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 over the period of 10 years. it is clear from the line graph that in comparison to the other two
company
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,
Company
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C
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 need more
time
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 to manufacture a
refrigerator
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 and the
refrigerator
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 production
time
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 taken by
Company
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B
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 remained stable during
this
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 period. In 1999,
Company
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C
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 took 35
hours
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 to manufacture a
refrigerator
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,
while
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 the figure for
Company
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 A and
Company
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B
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 was 30
hours
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 and around 27
hours
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 respectively. By 2000, the production
time
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 of a
refrigerator
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 for
Company
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C
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 had decreased to about 29
hours
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. it took around 31
hours
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 to produce a
refrigerator
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 in
Company
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 A in 1999 and its figure experienced a noticeable decline, at 23
hours
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 in 2000.
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, between 1999 and 2000, the
refrigerator
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 production
time
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 for
Company
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B
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 saw a slight decrease, from 27
hours
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 to just over 25
hours
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, company, b, c, refrigerator, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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