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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much as imformation possible in scientific reaserch, business and the academic world others believe that some imforrmation its importent or too valuable to be shared freely .Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In the cut-throat competition between two or more communities in the present scenario.A few people think that it is helpful to deport more details in the scientific research zone,commerce zone and education region whilst some masses think that some details are more essential and worthful to be transferred without
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essay I will discuss both viewpoints and give my opinion in the trial paragraph. On the one hand, if students will get an education without
consideration
 they become more professional and get more opportunities for employment which is helpful for easy to grow and enhance their knowledge and idea.
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 they get peaceful relations with other societies and support people who migrate to their countries.,
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 they help with various foreign business policies.
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,many humankind believes that if they transfer details regarding the science sector,trade sector and education zone with others their lives and National security might get harmful to stay. ,
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 they are scared to lose their business secret among various societies and they want to retain their monopoly in various sectors and incline foreign currency in their countries.
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, I opined that information should be transferred with
consideration
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 without
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, if they transfer information without
consideration
 they get more ideas and knowledge
as well as
 get employment opportunities.,
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 if they transfer information without
consideration
 they get many benefits from others.
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