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Some people believe that governments should pay full course fees for students who want to study at universities. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The government,
according to
 some, should cover the cost of higher
education
 for everyone who wishes to attend. Even
while
 I see the value of making higher
education
 accessible to everyone, I worry about the potential adverse effects on the job market and academic outcomes that would emerge. Investing in our youth by covering their college costs has several apparent benefits.
First,
this
 policy would inspire children from low-income or underprivileged backgrounds to attend college. Because of
this
, children from less affluent backgrounds may have the same possibilities to
further
 their
education
 as students from wealthier families.
Second,
investing additional funds into universities may boost the quality of the working population.
This
 is because there would be a rise in the number of people with advanced degrees and well-developed skill sets, both of which are essential for sustained economic expansion.
Nonetheless
, I feel the downsides of
this
 approach are far more severe. Because of the high demand for making higher
education
 accessible for all, colleges and their resources would quickly become overwhelmed. Higher
education
 institutions are not yet equipped to handle a dramatic application surge, which would lead to a total collapse of the
education
 system.
In addition
, increasing the number of people seeking work will likely result from making higher
education
 more accessible. With universal access to higher
education
 at no cost, the number of people who get their degrees will rise dramatically.
Consequently
, there will be a lack of labour for inferior vocations and a surplus of labour in other fields as university graduates seek employment in their respective fields,
such
 as marketing and not construction. In conclusion,
although
 I agree that expanding access to higher
education
 is desirable, I am concerned about the negative consequences
this
 may have
on-campus
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 resources and the labour market.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Higher education
  • University tuition
  • Public good
  • Economic growth
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Merit-based scholarships
  • Need-based grants
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Educational equity
  • Income-contingent loans
  • Graduate tax
  • Financial aid
  • Student loans
  • Subsidize
  • Taxpayer funding
  • Underappreciation
  • Workforce development
  • Access to education
  • Higher learning institutions
  • Government expenditure
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